This song comes off to a great start with a nice intro, fine instrumentation and good timing of the beginning of the verse. I have a feeling the quality of the recording is not doing this song justice.

A very quirky, original piece.

I can hear what you had in mind (basically it can be a good idea), but I am not sure that this is it? Is it?

good hook on the intro some neat little keyboards run with a good build through to the chorus
quite a quirky vocal delivery but it works actually good counter melodies through this track
its all been put together well and overall some potential