I love the message of the song. This would be a hit with the right music. I would like more of a story. V1 was had to understand. I got the hook by the chorus.
1) Does my intro make you want to hear the song? NO.
2) Does my opening line draw you in and make you want to hear more?
3) Is my melody interesting? NO
4) Does my melody get stuck in your head? Some what
5) Does my chorus stand out and take the song to a higher place? some what
Country sound nice.