Peter Boynton

over 30 days ago to dolylamby's posse

Hi Posse -
Thanks for your kindly review of 'Trust Me Just A Little'. People seem to like that tune, and i just got it placed in a music library. EeHah!
I listened to your songs - really nice stuff! I especially enjoyed 'The Right Time For Me' and 'Why'd You Go And Take Blu?'. I love y'alls sense of humor.
Write on!
- Peter Boynton

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dolylamby's posse

over 30 days ago

Thanks Peter... The world needs a little humor.

BobBentley9033958

over 30 days ago to dolylamby's posse

Hi,
Many thanks for your thorough review of Dance Hall Of Dreams. When it comes to critiques I go out of my way to encourage feedback, good and bad. If I get knocked, as we all do at some time or another, I will take it on the chin and learn what I can from the feedback, or maybe just politely ignore it. However, this is an exception because of your comment: "I don't feel lines like 'In their spiritual home' would be a real thought here............"
As it happens, the lyrics are incredibly apt. The song was written especially for a concert for ballroom patrons in a UK venue where I used to work. It's based on the real lives of an elegant, elderly, couple who had met as teenagers and danced in the ballroom all through their adult years - and were still dancing there in their 80's. The line you have singled out is 100% appropriate, our ballroom had indeed been their spiritual home through all those years.
I do believe in honesty when it comes to reviews, otherwise no one gains from the process - and you are entitled to our views. However, I am mindful that I am no better than my peers, we are all struggling to be as good as we can be. Although, even quite recently, I have suggested that a phrase may not seem quite right, perhaps it doesn't scan well etc., there is no way I would suggest to my peer that they should "find real lines that say something rather than ones that just fill in the space", especially when I had just awarded 100% for Quality Of The Lyrics.
Thanks again, no hard feelings,
Bob

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dolylamby's posse

over 30 days ago

Hi Bob! I'm sorry you were offended or disagree with my comment on some of your lyrics. Be clear, I was very impressed with the warmth of your theme and how you delivered it. I listened to this one a few times and that particular line seemed out of place with the rest of the story. I get it and could see that it was one of those personal 'close to the heart' storylines that came out in the song. I simply felt the line was used more for the rhyming, but I see it wasn't. My opinion, and that's all it is, is that the general listener may not follow it at that area of your story. Thanks for your comments and clearing up your intentions in the song.

BobBentley9033958

over 30 days ago

I'm sorry I don't know what name to address you by but be assured no offence has been taken. Thank you for the apology, it is very much appreciated.
Good luck with your music,
Bob

PHIL MITTEN STORYTELLER

over 30 days ago to dolylamby's posse

Hi There , thanks for reviewing a couple of my songs . Teaching The New Dog Old Tricks , is next on the list for a revamp !
I had my 5 minutes of fame with NEVER , when it reached the final of the UK Song writing contest a couple of years.ago .

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dolylamby's posse

over 30 days ago

KEEP ON WRITING!